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Crymsonblaze
05.03.13 | sputnik, the human potato
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on a long winding beach
a young thing sits
it's full of elitism
and full of shits
the internet has known
but it has never loved
the sad young potato
that was sent from above
it lived in an alley
for most of its life
it struggled, impoverished
every day full of strife
but one day a blaze
joined up on the site
and the potato was changed
on that very night
a young handsome jester
was the savior known
but the others were jealous
so they chose to disown
they flamed him for choosing
such a manly, proud name
and failed to see the genius
in all of his games
the blaze scorched the spud
and burnt it to cinders
and built it back stronger
to survive through the winters
but then a man named malleus
finally made his debut
that's a dumb name for sure
but the story is true
he stroked and he stroked
his ego, i think
but then he gave up
once pushed to his brink
so the blaze became a fire
and engulfed him whole
it smoked him completely
like mal once did with poles
and so the great blaze
spreaded far away
but some say he returns
every couple of days | Crymsonblaze
05.03.13 | any c&c would be appreciateed | Eclecticist
05.03.13 | I read roughly three lines and then lost interest. | Crymsonblaze
05.03.13 | so... too complex? | MO
05.03.13 | 2/10 would never read again | Gwynbleiddsfang
05.03.13 | tl;dr but good job! | Calc
05.03.13 | 2 rules your poem on the other hand...
didn't read. | Necrotica
05.03.13 | This is one of my many kvlt m/ poems that I've written this year:
Men so maleficent, poised
to atone falsely beneath
winter skies as the widow gazes;
bathed in ice, this solitaire, familiarity
in such unease
Quindi lei è caduta
senza tregua
akin to Countess Bathory's
final breaths against solid stone
unable to dream once more
mistress death departs
no speech uttered in her sorrow
isolated in such presence
malevolent goddess attracting
company of nearby ravens
further despairing as we gaze
about the hailstorm, bleak
unforgiving, remorse is naught
bathing in nautical twilight
embracing dusk in respite
dreams in bloodied nightfall
to which the spectres congregate. | Necrotica
05.03.13 | This is my other really kvlt one:
Lament on truenorth field
as such this snow defiled
vast as sin hath carved
the glorious skyline
essence of enthrallment
jetblack wings of majesty
abandoned to mourn ev'ry dusk
funeral embrace in Gehenna
nichnytsia upon ebonied woods
as Perelesnyk's graven allure
designs the flesh upon which my
spirit resides
sorrowful torrents of the Vila
sent to despair me as I walk
impenetrable pitchblackness follows;
the Velebit mountain far beyond me
its lifelinks cry
Živila, premila,
Živila, premila
abandoning the light
sealed in flesh
the lifelink is a dead art
and sentience has vanished.
| Crymsonblaze
05.03.13 | thanks guys!!!!
dam good critiques!! | YoYoMancuso
05.03.13 | 1/5 would not bang | Crymsonblaze
05.03.13 | i would! | Necrotica
05.03.13 | No problem, Crym | Crymsonblaze
05.28.13 | thank you guysQ | Necrotica
05.28.13 | ya buddy | JohnnyoftheWell
05.28.13 | This is my other really kvlt one:
Dude, I knew you were m/, but that's...M/? | Crymsonblaze
06.01.13 | shit my ass that's good |
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