Phlegm i think ur writing is fine... if you are writing just as a hobby then why bother trying to please the stale sheep that flock about this website. .... stay true to yourself and don't let the lame overcome ..... Peace October 12 06:00 AM
ScuroFantasma ...i think the biggest issue is for your reviews. 2. Break up you pragraphs, it's much easier to read when there are eight smaller paragraophs as opposed to 4 giant ones, it's also more inviting whereas a wall of text can scare people off, or they won't bother to read it at all. And 3. Try to work on your run-on sentences and fix up your comma/full-stop placement. This was something else I noticed in your reviews that I think would make a big different to their fluidity. Hope this helps :). October 12 05:31 AM
